MaxMartin327's Characters!

General
Name: Wren Moss
Age/Birthday: 14
Gender: Female
District: 3
Rich or Poor?: poor
Weapon of Choice: Dagger
Personality/Appearance
Physical Appearance: Wren has bright green eyes and long, black hair. She has very pale skin and is 5’7 ft. Wren is very nimble, skinny and agile. She has prominent cheekbones and no cheek chub.
Personality: Wren is very hard to be close to. She doesn’t like to be crossed and if you do and she isn’t super-happy, she’ll let you borrow her dagger… in the back. She is always hostile never shows emotion. She will not ally unless she really likes that person. If she allies she will never betray that person.
Flaw: she has a hard time trusting someone
Talents: Dagger, running, climbing and sword.
Family/History
Family: No mother, father, older brother (Mackie), Younger brother (Samson).
Pets: None
Brief History: Wren has had a very traumatic child hood. She watched her mother bleed to death from a stab in the chest from a Peacekeeper. Her mother is dead and she lives with her dad and her older brother and younger brother. Her father is a drunkard, so she has to take care of Samson, and Mackie takes care of her. Her mother was caught smuggling a new invention out of the factory she worked at. Wren's mother was dragged to their house and shot in her living room.
Others
Preferred Angles: Mysterious, Hostile,
Angles this tribute will not do: Sexy, Innocent
Token: Golden armband (Greek style)
Other: None


My Character looks like this:

(Moved this to its own Topic.)

Nice charrie! Buuuut your history is missing 2 sentences once that's done it'll be accepted!

ok thnx! I will fix it

I edited my post sonow it has what it needs!

Wren is accepted! (I also fixed your sheet up to show you how things were placed.

Ok! thank you!

I have a new character!


General
Name: (First and Last) Aries Sagittarus
Age/Birthday: 12
Gender: Female
District: 2
Rich or Poor?: poor
Weapon Of Choice: Sword
Personality/Appearance Open and friendly, but can slit your throat if she wants to.
Physical Appearance: (Must be at least 4 sentences.) Aries has blond hair and blue eyes. She is 5’0 and has a scar from her temple to the tip of her chin. Her hair falls to the small of her back and is wavy. She has long eyelashes and light brown eyebrows. She prefers to keep the scar hidden and never tucks her hair behind her ears.
Personality: (Must be at least 4 sentences.) She is bubbly and energetic, and very knowledgeable. She is very mature and knows a lot for her age. She can be mischievous sometimes and is also helpful to her parents. When you become her friend, she will go to the ends of the world for you, but it is difficult to really know her and befriend her.
Flaw: (At least 1) Too loyal
Talents:(Must list three) Can flick knives from her wrist into a target, at most, 11 yards away. She is the best in her class at swordplay. She can throw a dart into the center of a target 10 yards away.
Family/History
Family: (Mother, father, siblings [if any.])Aries has a Mother, Father and two younger brothers, Sammy and Leo. Who are eleven and four.
Pets: Aries has a pet Red-Tailed Hawk.
Brief History: (Must be at least 4 sentences.) Aries used to have an older sister, but she died in the games. She was killed by a District 8 tribute so she hates District 8. Her sister, Myah, was 12 and Aries was 9 when Myah was reaped and placed in the Hunger Games. Aries has sworn, now that if she is placed in the games, she will kill any Tribute from District 8.
Others
Preferred Angles :(Innocent, Sexy, Mysterious.. etc..) Mysterious, Sexy and Friendly.
Angles this tribute will not do: (Max. 3) Strong, Innocent and Tough.

Everything looks okay, but there is one small issue in the talents section. THe issue is, simply, that your character is too powerful. Let me review this with you.

"Talents:(Must list three) Can flick knives from her wrist into a target, at most, 20 yards away. She can beat anyone at swordplay. She can throw a dart into the center of a target 100 yards away."

Now, even in district 2, she can't beat absolutely anyone at swordplay, especially not if she's only 12. That's just plain improbable. Also, 100 yards is a long way to throw a dart, regardless of where it hits on the target. According to the Guiness Book of World Records, the farthest distance someone has ever hit a bull's eye with a dart was about 16 feet. There are 3 feet in a yard. 100 yards? Sorry, but that is just not going to happen, even in Panem, even in District 2. The knives thing is fine, although 20 yards seems a bit much. I don't mind if she's exceptionally good at throwing stuff or fencing, but 'beating anyone' and '100 yards' for a bull's eye seem more than a bit much, especially for a 12-year-old. I've been a 12-year-old. Nobody was about to throw 100 yards away. The psychics just wouldn't work.

So, all in all, adjust the talents. Although it doesn't matter much in the Games, she is WAYYYYY too powerful. I'm okay with the knives because, like I said, it doesn't matter much in the Games, but please, be at least moderately realistic.

Other than that, she's fine, so just change that and someone will accept her if the changes are satisfactory.

Ok! i have fixed the problems. Sorry about that! i was distracted and I should have taken more care to details. Not to be rude but, when I was eleven, well, there were some pretty violent people there. Any way thank you.If there is anything I need to fix, can you tell me? thank you again!

"She can beat anyone at swordplay." <--- Rain told you to fix this also, she couldn't just beat anyone, that's basically god modding saying she beat anyone at swordplay because if that was the case she'd have to win all fights involving swordplay and like I said, god modding. So if you could fix that please.

fixed it!

Sorry, you need four sentences for history and then she's good.

all edited!

Aries is accepted!