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Accepted

Name: Dove Velvet
Age/Birthday: 14 5/29
Gender:female
District:8
Family: Crow Velvet,(father) Swan Velvet (mother) Raven Velvet (little sister)
Brief History: Dove has always lived a tough life around in the lower district of 8. She was taught bird calls and bird identification by her mother. This extraordinary talent gave her family their bird related names. She has learned from birds and can sweep through trees appearing to be gliding. She knows how to find a good shelter easily and is very vigilant. She has been teaching her younger sister raven in her bird related stratagies.
Physical Appearance: Dove is only five feet and has a petite build. her green eyes and dark skin let her blend in with the trees. She mostly keeps her hair short. She is only 95 pounds and very hard to see if you are not looking for her, and sometimes even if you are looking for her she is hard to find.
Personality: Dove has a Passion for singing but rarely talks normally. she thinks a step ahead of the step ahead of her. Making her a great strategist. She is very nice and has a beautiful voice. She is always up for a game and gets energetic often. She is everyone friend until she finds a good reason not to be a persons friend. She also has adhd and can be ambushed of focusing on something else.
Flaw: Dove is not good at close range at all but her speed allows her to get out of situations like that most of the time. She mainly focuses on one thing and can be easily ambushed if she is focusing on something else.
Pets: She appropriately has a pet dove but she thinks of all the birds in the forest as her pet.
Rich or Poor?:Somewhat poor with enough money to get her food but not much else.
Weapon of Choice:Primarily her wits is her greatest weapon, but she will never turn down a long range weapon such as a bow or throwing knife.
Talents:Talented in bird calling and identification, good with long range weapons, and she is very clever and strategic. She also has a great voice and can distract people with her songs.
Preferred Angles: Dove likes going with a whimsical and awe inspiring performance.
Angles this tribute will not do (Max. 3):Tough, or sexy.
Other:N/A

I like her so far, but there are a few issues I'd like to discuss before I fully accept her:

1. Her talents making her able to speak with birds. You can have her recognize bird-calls and be able to replicate them very accurately, but she can't literally talk to birds.

2. (WARNING: This is a long one... feel free to skim it, but please do read at least the end of it.) I feel there is a little too much birdiness. Nothing against birds, I actually thought her family and birdiness was very clever, but the history goes a little far. The fact that she can do something relating to "seemingly flying" makes me nervous, perhaps you could change it to something like "it would appear to a viewer from below that she could almost be gliding/flying/fluttering/floating/etc." or something. That's just an example, and not a very good one. I just mean the excessive bird analogies as a whole, not that you should remove that specific one. It's just having befriended almost every species of bird+extraordinary talent+seemingly flying+building nests+training her little sister to become a bird is a bit too much. It's hard to explain, sorry. Maybe if you listed some of those as a talent, it would seem a little less... birdy because normally something a charrie is good at can be excused if they don't have too many talents. I suggest you change the 'talking to birds' talent to something like 'just generally good with birds (knows bird-calls, species of birds, makes nests, hangs out in the trees, etc.)' or something similar.

3. Capitalization- Not a huge problem. I understand. Still, though, for next time, just a gentle reminder. If you want some help with it, there is a school section for that type of thing. If it's just out of laziness, then I totally understand, but it'd be great if during actual posts you could make a bit of an effort. If it's a underlying cause I don't know about, that's fine.

Mainly the first one and the end of the second are important. Other than that, Dove looks great. Good job!

I made it less bird centric and more of a true person.

Her personality doesn't seem to have any flaws. Could you fix that? Also, your capitalization is still off. Fix those things and she'll be accepted.

Well, the talents and family look good, thanks, but Bali's right about the personality. Singing isn't really a character trait. Loving to sing fits because it's a like/dislike, but a talent should really go in talents, or other if her voice isn't good enough to fit into talents.

One small note- 95 lbs. for somebody who is 5'4" is pretty severely underweight. I generally use a BMI calculator to find out what is normal. You don't have to use it, but if you'd like to, here's a link:

http://www.nhlbisupport.com/bmi/

5'4" isn't really short, so I'd suggest putting her weight at 105 or above at bare minimum. A BMI of 18.5 or lower is underweight, and 105 for 5'4" has a BMI of 18.0, which is understandable because she's not wealthy. But 95 pounds? 16.3. That's quite underweight. 95 lbs. is barely healthy for someone whose only 5 feet tall. That's all.

Capitalization fixed. And I added a new flaw. I also added a little more

Accepted

Name:Henry Gale
Age/birthday: 16 October 13th
Gender:male
District: 5
Family: Emily Gale (deceased) Roger Gale (deceased) ricardo auditore (leader of the others/ father figure)
Brief history: Henry's mother died while giving birth to him. This turned his father into an abusive alcaholic. Henry's father would go into a drunken rage on the mothers birthday blaming Henry for her death. A few years later Henry killed his abusive father and joined a mysterious group that roams the streets of district five known as "the others".
Physical appearance: Henry has light brown hair with blue eyes. He has many stress wrinkles for a kid of his age. He shows some scars on his back and face from where his father beat him. He is five foot ten and 135 lb.
Personality: Henry has a very twisted personality. He will be your best friend when he finds you of use to him and your enemy when he is done with you. He speaks in a monotonous voice and almost always keeps a straight face. He uses sarcastic humor. He is very passive aggresive and finds it easy to turn people on themselves. Making it hard for the person to find their own self worth.
Flaw: sometimes over confident In his abilities.
Pets: a stray dog named buddy that roams around with "the others".
Rich or poor: poor
Weapon of choice:knives or hand to hand combat. He can fashion weapons out of useless junk.
Talents: extremely persuasive. As great independent as he is with a group. Can take on any personality he needs to for any situation.
Preffered angles: friendly welcoming nice
Angles this tribute will not do: evil or overpowering.
Other: face claim is Jamie bell.

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. This is ricardo played by nester carbonell

This is Henry Gale himself.

He's good except for the flaw. Try to make it about him, not about how others see him. Other than that, no problem! 'The Others'.... hah. Just fix the flaw and I'll accept him.

Changed it

Okay, Henry Gale is ACCEPTED because Josh is in the Games, so he doesn't really count.

Family: father: Reges Philben a wealthy and narcassistic trade leader in district ten. Mother: Manio Philben a sweet but over protective mother that does not approve of her husbands greedines

Brief history: Talmon grew up as a child in district 10 basically being raised in nothing but his home. On his 12th birthday his father pushed him out into the real world. He was deemed socially awkward and did not make to many friends. He was always known as "that rich kid" around school, he tried to reject this and talk to people but he failed. He is honestly very friendly.

Appearance: Talmon has wavy brown hair and brown eyes. His hair is brunette and he has a slightly oval face. He is five foot ten and has always been called lanky. His arms are long though so he has a good reach.

Personality: as previously said Talmon is socially awkward and doesn't make much eye contact when talking. He has trouble talking in front of crowds and making friends too. He is honestly very nice and has some cool talents. He enjoys writing and reading.

Flaw: being socially awkward makes it hard for him to make allies. His lanky arms make him untalented with a bow.

Pets: he has a pug named rashny

Rich or poor: used to be rich but now poor

Weapon of choice: his long arms give him talented with close range weapons including swords, he uses throwing knives on occasion too.

Talent: long arms give him superior reach, he can run fast, and he knows very much about the trading industry and how to make a deal, because of his father.

Preffered angle: socially awkward

Angles this tribute will not do: intimidating or sexy.

Other: face claim is Michael cera.

Michael Cera Talmon Philben is Accepted.

Theta is ACCEPTED. I'm afraid I don't have a fancy graphic for you, though. xD No seal of approval or anything. Oh well. You know what? Here are some pretty BA seals. They all approve.

Zep is Accepted